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The Egg
27-08-2013, 04:03 AM
Post: #1
The Egg
The Egg

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Once Upon a Time.


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A boy named Jack walked along the beach
by himself.

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Jack was a miserable child, his dear mother died
a few years back leaving him with his mean,
old Grandpa to raise him. The Grandpa beat
Jack daily, for no reason at all.
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They were also very poor and Jack was often
hungry.
This all took a toll on young Jack and he became
as mean and nasty as his Grandpa that he hated.
As a result Jack had no friends at all.
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Jack kicked the sand angrily and screamed at the
wind. "Why must I always be so hungry!
"Why , why , Why???? he shouted.
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After Jack's outburst of emotions he felt faint
from hunger.
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Jack recovered his strength, and spotted something on the beach.
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Jack was astonished at the huge prize.
"WOW, what a huge egg.??"

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Jack's stomach growled loudly at the thought of
scrambled eggs or eggs cooked in any way for that
matter, especially eggs that he personally would get to
eat.
He crossed the beach quickly to see his
prize.

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To Jacks delight it really was a giant egg on the
beach.
"Oh Lucky Day for me,
you look delicious," he said to the large egg as
he examined it more closely.
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The egg was indeed very large and it took both of his hands to carry the egg.
"I'm going to cook you up and eat you for lunch today," he told the egg he carried.
He staggered along under the weight. "But I wonder, how should I cook you? Should I boil you or fry you up with some butter and fresh herbs?"
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After walking a distance Jack stopped to take a break, he set the egg down on a log of driftwood and scratched his head. He seemed a bit puzzled. The egg appeared to have gotten alot bigger since he first found it on the beach in it's nest of sea weed.
It must be my imagination, he thought to himself. But when he picked up the egg, he noticed it was much heavier than when he set it down. He struggled along the beach dunes with the large, heavy, greenish egg and tried not to trip through the scraggly beach grass.
Then to Jacks relief he seen his small, run down shack that he lived in with his mean old Grandfather.

Never the less, it was his home for now and he was happy to see the small but sturdy wagon his mother had given him long ago as a birthday present back in happier days.
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Jack brushed away a tear at the thought of his mother. She had been long since dead and he missed her much.
Then Jacks stomach growled very LOUDLY.
Jack once again put the large, greenish egg down, and left it at the edge of the sand dunes so he could go and get his wagon and use it to pull the egg home.
When Jack returned a few minutes later, the egg had grown even bigger. Jack could barley get it into his little wagon.
"I had better cook you up quick, before you get to big to fit in any pan or pot we've got!" I hope you are delicious, I am very , very hungry," Jack told the egg, he patted it and began the short journey back to the shack he called home.
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His mean old Grandpa already had a fire going when Jack brought the now HUGE egg home.
[font=verdana, geneva, lucida, lucida grande, arial, helvetica, sans-serif]"I bet it is going to be delicious," crooned the mean ole Grandpa and he licked his lips in anticipation. [/font]
"Looks like you finally did something right for a change, Sonny boy," the mean old Grandpa made an attempt to pat Jack on the head, but Jack thought he was going to get hit as usual and quickly shied away out of the old mans reach.
The mean old grandpa cackled.
"Well, lets cook it up." said the grandpa.
"How should we cook it ?" Boil it or fry it in butter with herbs?" Grandpa asked eagerly, for he was very hungry to.
"I don't know, " said Jack. I think I would like it fried in butter with herbs."
"Sounds good," said Grandpa and he brought down a fry pan, spoon and large bowl.
When Jack turned around to get the egg out of the wagon, the wagons wheels suddenly collapsed under the weight of the now GIANT, Greenish Egg.


Then the egg gave a loud "Crack!" and cracked open.
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A large yellow eye peeked out of the crack .

The egg then cracked open the rest of the way and out popped a Red Sea Dragon.

Right in front of their eyes it quickly became the size of a cow, then as big as their house.

The Giant Red Sea Dragon looked at them both, it seemed to have stopped growing for a moment.
It smiled at them with sharp teeth.
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Then it said to them.

"You look delicious, I bet you will taste great! Hmmmm, but, how should I cook you? Boil you or fry you up with butter and herbs?"

Before the mean old Grandpa and Jack could come to their senses and run away, the Red Sea Dragon was upon them with his huge sharp teeth.

With two quick bites the hungry Red Sea Dragon gobbled up the Grandpa and Jack.
"Mmmmmm," said the Red Sea Dragon after consuming the boney old man and the bitter boy Jack!
"Not to bad raw either."
With a loud "BURP!!" The Dragon walked back to the ocean, jumped in with a big splash and was never noticed again.

The End.

Thanks for reading. Please leave me a comment and let me know what you think.
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27-08-2013, 11:18 AM
Post: #2
RE: The Egg
I actually like this. It's like Roald Dahl with the Sims. The beginning reminded me of Great Expectations, although the ending is a bit bleak... but hey, that's a story for ya. I suppose it's like those children's tales with the unhappy kid who hates life until discovering something secret and being taken off into a wonderful new world, except, instead of being taken off into a wonderful new world, he is just killed. Maybe he knew the egg was dangerous, but he just wanted to end his life and take his mean old grandpa with him Tongue

Eh, this story could be interpreted a thousand different ways

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27-08-2013, 05:15 PM
Post: #3
RE: The Egg
I like the ending very much! Do you have more short stories up your sleeve, Tasia?
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28-08-2013, 12:36 AM
Post: #4
RE: The Egg
Moral of the story - when given the choice between a giant egg or seaweed for dinner, always choose the seaweed, even if you're from the Hebrides! Biggrin

(I can think of certain people that will be disappointed there wasn't a granny being eaten in the story!) Tongue

At the risk of sounding a wimp, this picture scared the crap out of me!

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Excellent short story Tasia, with a neat twist! Clapping

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28-08-2013, 03:46 AM (This post was last modified: 28-08-2013 04:28 AM by Tasia714.)
Post: #5
RE: The Egg
(27-08-2013 11:18 AM)Dwinger Wrote:  I actually like this. It's like Roald Dahl with the Sims. The beginning reminded me of Great Expectations, although the ending is a bit bleak... but hey, that's a story for ya. I suppose it's like those children's tales with the unhappy kid who hates life until discovering something secret and being taken off into a wonderful new world, except, instead of being taken off into a wonderful new world, he is just killed. Maybe he knew the egg was dangerous, but he just wanted to end his life and take his mean old grandpa with him Tongue

Eh, this story could be interpreted a thousand different ways
Hey thank you so much for your nice review. I wrote this story in one afternoon when I was looking at a site on how to write short stories for children. I never entered the contest, I thought the ending was too scary.
I had to look up who Roald Dahl was. I had no idea he wrote Charlie and the Chocolate Factory. That is one of my all time favorite stories. Loved the movie with Gene Wilder. The new one is OK also, but I like the original better.
You know your literature.... smile... I have never read the book Great Expectations but I have seen the movie. Thank you for inspiring me to keep writing.
Simcerely,
Tasia Biggrin

P.S I love a unexpected and twisted ending.
(27-08-2013 05:15 PM)Caspin Wrote:  I like the ending very much! Do you have more short stories up your sleeve, Tasia?
Hi Caspin, Thank you so much for reading my story and leaving a nice comment. Biggrin Yes, I do have some more short stories to post. I hope to hear what you think of them.
Simcerely,
Tasia. Smile
(28-08-2013 12:36 AM)Minty Wrote:  Moral of the story - when given the choice between a giant egg or seaweed for dinner, always choose the seaweed, even if you're from the Hebrides! Biggrin

(I can think of certain people that will be disappointed there wasn't a granny being eaten in the story!) Tongue

At the risk of sounding a wimp, this picture scared the crap out of me!

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Excellent short story Tasia, with a neat twist! Clapping

Egyptiandance Wacko Fryingpan
Hi there Minty, LOL that is crazy picture.. Thank you so much for reading my short story and leaving me a comment. I really appreciate the feedback. Clapping
I had no idea what or where Hebrides was, so I looked it up. Wow! Its about Scotland.That is cool. Now that I think of it the coast line in my story does resemble the coastline I viewed online. I love learning new things. One of my favorite singers in the world is from Scotland, Alley Kerr. Love his "Sore Feet Song".

Perhaps the next short story I write will have the dear sweet old granny getting gobbled up.. smile..
Thanks again,
Simcerely,
Tasia Tease
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28-08-2013, 05:50 PM
Post: #6
RE: The Egg
All the best children's stories are scary. Kids can usually handle the dark stuff pretty well on the whole.

Glad to hear that there might be more Storytime with Tasia!
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29-08-2013, 09:48 AM
Post: #7
RE: The Egg
HAHA! I love this, it's a nice change with an odd ending. xD

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31-08-2013, 07:14 AM
Post: #8
RE: The Egg
LOL Thanks Ollie. I am a big fan of the Twilight Zone, Dark Shadows, Tales from the Darkside, Tales from the Crypt and lots of other strange stories. I like a surprise at the end that is not usual. Thank you so much for commenting on my story.
Simcerely,
Tasia, Smile
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